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题目：
假定你是李华。在一个英文网络论坛上，你看到名叫Kelly的中学生发帖寻求帮助。请根据帖子的内容、写作要点和要求回帖。 写作要点： 1.结合亲身经历告诉 Kelly要怎样认识这个问题； 2.给Kelly提出建议。 要求： 1.词数100左右； 2.内容充实，结构完整，语意连贯； 3.书写清晰工整。

答案

Dear Kelly, I know exactly how you feel. My mom was a smoker and I couldn't stand smelling the traces of cigarettes in her breath. In my view, a direct and honest talk counts most. Firstly, not only did I tell her about my feelings that I was worried about her and family members’ health but also offered my suggestion that she kick her addiction to smoking. Besides, we worked together to find solutions, such as chewing gums, doing exercise and so on. Eventually she quit altogether! I hope my personal experience will be of some help to you. Yours, LiHua

解析

【详解】第1步：根据提示可知，假定你是李华。在一个英文网络论坛上，你看到名叫Kelly的中学生发帖寻求帮助。请根据帖子的内容、写作要点和要求回帖。写作要点：1.结合亲身经历告诉 Kelly要怎样认识这个问题；2.给Kelly提出建议。 第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组）：smoker (吸烟者)；stand doing sth.(忍受做某事)；cigarettes(香烟)；in one’s view(在某人看来)；be worried about(担心)；offer suggestion(提出建议)；addiction to(成瘾)；solutions(解决办法)；such as(比如)；personal experience(个人经历)等。 第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。此处文章主要应用一般过去时。 第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。 【点睛】范文内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级表达方式，如Firstly, not only did I tell her about my feelings that I was worried about her and family members’ health but also offered my suggestion that she kick her addiction to smoking.运用倒装句；I hope my personal experience will be of some help to you.be of +抽象名词的运用。全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。